We have many talented writers in room 23. They apply what they have learned
about the Six Traits of Writing. They put effort into the various types
of writing that we practice throughout the school year. We wanted to take
this opportunity to "spotlight" fourth grade writers. At the end of each
month, we will spotlight busy writers in room 23.
March
A Pioneer Story
Written by Tiffany
In the wagon, I waited for
dinner soon after we made it through the forest. I sat inside and played
dolls with my friends and cousins. My neighbor and my family walked outside,
guarding the wagon. It was just in case something happened to the oxen
or the wagon train. The dark sky was like black tar, and the sun was sleeping
in the other side of the planet. Next, my family suggested we take a rest
because Pa was hungry and Ma was cooking inside. She cooked roasted pork,
salted beef, vegetables, carrots, broccoli, corn, and parsley. We walked
straight until we reached two sign that said, "SODA SPRINGS" and "THE SIERRA
NEVADA MOUNTAINS"
I shouted, "Could we go to Soda Springs
Ma? We could take some water from there and save it to drink during this
journey!"
"Maybe not, my dear, because I want
to go on," replied Ma.
"But it'd be scary in the dark and too
dangerous to cross the mountains in the dark like that. I might want to
take a drink first," included Pa.
I shook my head, but I wanted to take
a fresh drink before we went on. Then, the forest became foggy, and we
lost the signs. We couldn't see anything, not even the path that broke
into two. I was getting worried and even more worried if we didn’t make
it to California to start a new life. We needed to rest here and now. There
was no way we could make it through the fog that was growing heavier and
heavier than ever. I slept at the side of the wagon, but my friend kept
on kicking me on the cheek. I was getting annoyed and irritated.
The next morning, I woke up and looked
at the tent where my ma and pa slept. Ma was gone, but Pa was looking at
me as if he were going to faint. He looked very pale and white. He fell
back into bed while I ran to Ma to tell her what happened to Pa. She was
cooking breakfast. She was just sitting on a stool waiting for the food
to cool down a while so we could eat it without a problem.
Suddenly, I heard a boom sound coming from outside, and I jumped up
scared. I told Ma quickly that Pa was sick and carefully ran outside to
see what was going on. After us, my neighbor went outside to see what happened
to the wagon.
"HELP! HELP ME! PLEASE ANYBODY OUT THERE?!"
a voice called.
"Who's that? What's going on?" I asked
my neighbor.
"We better go check it out," answered
my neighbor.
We saw that one of the wagons broke
and the ox was freed. My neighbor shot its leg, and it started to bleed.
I screamed at my neighbor and ran back to the wagon that I slept in and
crawled inside. I grabbed my doll and lied down next to my friend, but
my cousins were gone! My neighbor went to the side of the cliffside and
saw my cousins trying to get up! They almost fell down with the wagon junk.
My neighbor grabbed one of them and grabbed the other one. Thanks to my
neighbor, the ox was limping over and not moving there on the side of the
mountain, and my cousins were massaging their arms and lying down on the
ground. I woke up my friend and he groaned.
"It's breakfast already? That was fast,
and what was going on?" he asked.
I replied, "You missed everything while
you were sleeping. I tried to wake you up, heavy sleeper."
We woke everyone up and told them what
had happened. Everybody tried not to panic but to continue the journey.
While we walked by, there was the poor little ox lying there on the cliffside
struggling because the bullet was still inside the leg, deep inside it.
The ox gave out a loud sound and was breathing hard and loud before it
lied down. We kept it and Ma tried to pull the bullet out which she did,
and Pa was just inside lying there looking dead if he were to faint instantly
within a second. Before we continued, we ate breakfast of oatmeal or gruel.
We held on to the ox and pulled him back on the trail, but this time it
was much more dangerous because of the mountains. We had to go up, and
then go down and help the others. After that, we could go and continue
on to California to start the new life, but now we had to do teamwork to
cross these dry lands, rivers, wet lands while making sure we stopped for
water.
I walked up first with the wagon behind me and kept on pulling and
pulling and pulling. It was heavy because of the ox that was putting much
weight on it. Then, the ox got up and went my direction. I helped along
the front and kept on pulling with my family, friends, and cousins. We
made it to the top somehow, and then when I looked at the side, my heart
pumped very fast and lively. I was scared because I could easily fall off
the cliffside and meet my death. Pa went out and helped me in the front.
He was still looking sick, but he wanted to help because he put a lot of
weight on the wagon that I, in the front, couldn't pull myself. I was limping
until my pa came to rescue me in all my struggles. Pa and Ma tied the poles
between the wheels just in case we fell down. So, we carefully walked down,
gaining a little speed, straight down towards the long narrow trail.
"AHHHHHH!" Ma screamed.
We came down with so much speed, but
instantly we stopped. The poles worked successfully! I hoped we would make
it through. Then, we helped the others. I still tried not to scream and
panic, but I dragged up my bravery and helped the others cross over the
mountains. We all made it although the ox was not felling well because
of the injury it had.
"All right!" I shouted, “We made it
through, and now we just have to cross the path.”
“Finally, we made it to California!”
my friend included.
We were going straight and following
the California Trail towards our new home! I suddenly saw a landmark and
showed it to everyone. It had a cross like the first one I had seen. I
was finally glad we made it through the mountains. I hope we really are
able to start a new life and relax in California. It should be better in
California. |
February
Why Toucans Have Colorful Beaks
Written and Illustrated by Estelle
Millions of years ago,
when God was still creating the unknown Earth, there lived an isolated
toucan who had a bland, gray beak, as gray as an elephant, my little one.
Toucan lived in a tropical rainforest laden with red razzle-dazzle trees
in a rad country called Madagascar in Africa. He never had any friends,
but he was kind-hearted and quite clumsy as well! One particular day, Toucan
was fed up of being very forlorn and lonesome. So he informed his mother
and father he was on an elaborate journey. They approved, but they were
still confused as to why he was taking such a risk just to make new friends
he can play with.
The next morning,
Toucan got ready for his dangerous adventure. He swooped over the long,
voung Chi-Shi River in the rainforest laden with red razzle-dazzle trees
in a rad country called Madagascar like the wind swirling around the air.
Swoosh! He flew and flew and flew.
“Where can I find something that will have
all the animals attracted to me?” muttered Toucan who became very grumpy
indeed. (He did have quite a temper if something took a long time to get,
my little one.)
He spotted a rare,
sare Coco-Boco frog with turquoise and kiwi spots. “Hey! Maybe he can help
me!” thought the amused Toucan. “Excuse me, where can I find something
that will make my beak- ah-attractive to the other popular jungle animals?”
“Go to the –um-
rainbow which is –um- colorful as-um- a various collection of berries,”
advised the clueless frog by the Chi-Shi river in the rainforest laden
with red razzle-dazzle trees in a rad country called Madagascar who really
didn’t want to talk to anyone as it was a very humid day, my little one.
The frog droned and droned and droned so much that Toucan left him with
a quick “goodbye.”
So Toucan flew
up to the colorful object, my little one. He was fascinated by all the
vibrant colors, so he stuck his head in the new fangled object and came
out having his beak more colorful and more colorful and more colorful than
a fruit bowl, my little one! He didn’t even realize it until he looked
in the glassy clear waters of the Chi- Shi River in the rainforest laden
with red razzle-dazzle trees in a rad country called Madagascar. “I did
it!” he thought with a look of triumph and victory.
He swooped and
swooped and swooped back home and showed his beak to his astonished parents
who were so surprised and ecstatic that even they went to this “rainbow”
to get beaks of their own. Toucan made lots of friends like the intelligent,
curious Elephant’s Child, camouflaged, sneaky Chameleon, and tall Giraffe!
You name it, he had it, my little one!
Ever since that
historical day, toucans always had quite an appealing, attractive characteristic.
Can you guess what their feature might be, my little one? It was their
beaks filled with all the colors of the towering rainbow---and a few extra
colors! |
January
The Blackout
Composed by Keanu
It was a dark, cloudy
night when my parents commanded me to buy medicine at a market. The
market was out in the creepy shadows of the foggy sky where clouds hung
on it. I was walking home from the market empty-handed because it
was closed. The enormous parking lot was vacant, not a single car
was seen. I was all alone with no company. Suddenly, it started
to shower, and thunder clamored which hurt my ears.
I quickly ran into
a dark alley where the rain didn't pour. There was a major blackout along
the block. I squinted at a sign hung on a store door. It said,"
OPEN 24 HOURS!" I knocked rapidly against the rusty, wet, wooden
door. A crinkled, wrinkly old man soon came on the window.
He put on his dusty glasses. He slowly approached the doorknob and
gripped it, rotating it slowly. The door gradually moved. As it did
that, the store bell rang. The creak of the door was noisy and also
hurt my ear. As I tried to speak, he slammed the door right in my face.
I grabbed a newspaper
and used it as an umbrella. I quickly ran on the sidewalk to the
next block, hoping the streetlights here wouldn't go out like they had
on the block before. But, it was suddenly pitch black. As I
kept walking, I bumped into many obstacles. Suddenly, I was unconscious
and fell down.
When I awoke, I
was in my living room. I blinked many times, and then I looked around.
My family was sleeping. I had the most exciting, adventurous
experience ever. As I tried to fall asleep, I wondered who had saved
me.
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December
Junipero Serra Journal
Composed by Johnny
I, Junipero Serra, had a dream of founding nine missions along El Camino
Real. Today, the dream finally came true when I found the ninth mission
in Alta California.
I was born on November 24, 1713, on an island called Majorca which is located
near Spain’s coast. As a young boy, I had always dreamed of going to the
New World. In my classes at school, my teachers often told me about this
new land called New Spain. I decided to be a missionary in this new land
when I grew up.
In August 1749, I made my decision to travel to the New World. I was worried
about going to the New World by myself before I knew that my old friend
named Francisco Palou was going, too. Francisco Palou and I left when I
was only 35 years old. We went on a voyage by ship and arrived in New Spain
on December 31, 1749. My old friend and I journeyed to Mexico City where
I began to work with the Indians in the Sierra Gorda Mountains.
The hot climate made it difficult to live in the Sierra Gorda Mountains.
Padres that lived there often got ill and never stayed long enough to even
learn the Indian language. I felt heartbroken for the padres that died
in the hot weather. In addition, food was also hard to grow in the Sierra
Gorda Mountains, so they had to come by mule from Mexico City. In total,
I had spent nine years with the Indians living in the mountains. I taught
them our own religion and showed them how to grow their own food.
In 1758, I returned to Mexico City to work as a home missionary for another
nine years. In 1767, I was sent to Baja California as the president of
their missions! I couldn’t believe my luck! My friends, Father Francisco
Palou and Father Crespi, joined me to Baja California where we served as
the presidents of the missions. Each of the missions had its own advantages
and disadvantages. After all, they all look unique from each other. I felt
so happy when I walked between each mission.
A surprise hit me in 1769! Viceroy Galvez asked me to go on an expedition
with Gaspar de Portola to Alta California. I was to teach the Indians our
own religion and start a chain of missions there. My dream was about to
come true! On my journey to San Diego from Mexico City, my swollen feet
and legs caused more pain than ever. I knew my life would soon be over.
Through all the adventures, I had finally started a chain of missions on
the Alta California coast. In addition, I also knew that I had accomplished
my goal of starting nine missions on El Camino Real.
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November
The Mojave Indians
Composed by Ethan
N.
The Mojave Indians was one of the Indian tribes that lived in the Desert
Region. They lived east of the Cahuilla tribe near fresh springs to get
water. They also lived where clay could be found. The Mojave used the clay
to make bowls or anything else they could make to survive. The food near
the Mojave tribe was very scarce because the climate was very hot.
The Mojave changed their style of houses as the climate changed. In the
summer, they built houses with flat tops and open sides to let to cool
air in. In the winter, they built their homes out of out of logs and arrow
weeds. After building the houses, they would smother on some mud to make
the house stronger and steadier which also helped to keep the rain out.
At least two to three families lived in one Mojave house. This tribe made
amazing homes.
Food was very scarce in the Mojave Desert. They natives farmed, hunted,
and gathered. The Colorado River allowed the Mojave Indians to farm. They
grew crops such as pumpkins, corn, and beans. Women gathered seeds, fruits,
cactus, and mesquite. In the winter, women made clay granaries to store
food. Men hunted fish and small animals like rabbits, raccoons, and rattle
snakes.
The Mojave Indians were the people of dreams and visions. They shared legends
of war, bravery, magic, and heroes. Also, they practiced the art of tattooing
their faces. After a Mojave Indian died, they would cremate the body along
with his or her belongings.
The Mojave traded with many tribes. They ran many miles along California
to trade. They traded clay bowls for abalone and dentaleme shells. Mojave
Indians liked o mold clay and other animal’s faces. Clay was very important
to the Mojave Indians. |
October
Native Creation Myth
By Annie
The bright, golden sun shone beautifully in the big blue sky filled with
puffy white clouds. Bright colorful flowers filled the gleaming redwood
forest with sparkling dots of rainbow blooms. Soft patches of grass shimmered
in the sunlight. The wind whistled softly through the warm sunbeams. Coyote
trotted along the riverside, sniffing the aroma of the river flowers. Coyote
thought about the Pomo children and how they were going to sleep with the
sun shining in the sky all the time. Coyote called Great Spirit.
“Why do you
call me!” shouted Great Spirit.
“Oh mighty, Great Spirit, the Pomo
children can’t sleep because of the bright light of the sun. What do I
do to make it dark?” asked Coyote.
“You must gather redwood bark,” responded Great Spirit. “Then you must
break it into tiny pieces.”
Coyote did what Great Spirit said.
“Great
Spirit, what do I do now?” Coyote panted.
“Throw the pieces into the sky,” snapped Great Spirit.
Coyote flung the pieces into the sky. He
stared in amazement as the pieces dyed the sky as black as bats.
“Now the Pomo children will sleep peacefully,” smiled Great Spirit.
Weeks went by. Coyote strode through the
Pomo village as he heard crying. Coyote looked in one of the village huts
and saw a young child sitting on the floor.
“Why are you crying, little one?” Coyote whispered.
“It is always too dark, and I can’t see anything,” whimpered the little
child.
Coyote didn’t know what to do, so he quickly
ran to Great Spirit. “Oh mighty Great Spirit, it is always too dark at
night for the young Pomo children, so what can I do?” howled Coyote.
“Gather tropical flower petals and throw them into the sky,” commanded
Great Spirit.
Coyote did what Great Spirit said and blasted
the petals into the sky. Suddenly, the petals turned into flickering embers
and made stars. One last petal flew into the sky, and with a burst, the
petal became the moon.
“The Pomo children will no longer be afraid of the dark.” |
September
Paragraph Form
Students in room 23 practice
writing solid paragraphs which include a topic sentence, supporting details,
transitional words, and a concluding sentence. Here is an example of a
solid paragraph:
The Coastal Region
By Ocha
Did you know that the Pacific Ocean helps warm the Coastal Region in winter
and cools it in the summer? Winds from the ocean blow east to west. This
makes California’s northern coast damp and very foggy. Usually each year,
more than 80 inches of rain fall along the coast. Some of the world’s tallest
trees called the redwoods grow along the coast. That’s because it has so
much rain! In conclusion, the winds from the Pacific Ocean affects California’s
climate. |
Similes
How effectively do children
use similes to improve word choice? We practiced word choice by using simles
to describe ourselves.
Simile Poem
By Amanda
Going on a field trip, I am excited as a dog
when it gets a treat.
During lunchtime at school, I’m sneaky as a
cat.
In class, I am quiet as a gerbil.
I am a happy student in room 23, ready to do
my best.
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